The smoke spirals in mushroom clouds
And he gets his buzz, the addiction locking tighter
The addiction of awesome.
He knows he should quit
But Aetdrug is too awesome.
He exhales a sad plume of smoke.
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This poem, Aet, is a very good one. Short and to the point and I'll definatly try to avoid Aetdrug.
Oooooohhhh!!! I love it I love it!! Wow. I wanna try aetdrug
This was amazing and I thought that your use of awesome twice was fine.. Not annoying.
I wanted it to go on and on
Hmm... this is very short and to the point, I like it. It is pretty well written, though the use of awesome twice annoyed me a bit, you might want to find a synonym for it the second time. You also might want make the last line of the poem its own stanza since its a separate thought and sentence. Other than those minor things, this is a nice piece of work. Keep writing! =D
Note to self: Avoid Aetdrug XD
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haha. Very Awesome.
Conceit pulled of eloquently. Wow. I never thought I would see something like that. I don't touch grammer or style only the message behind a poem and clearly the message is awesome. So I can't find anything wrong with this poem or the message because it's trully way to awesome for words. good job, write more, and good luck in the future